Wednesday, February 23, 2011

Confidence Builder

Write the first sentence. Hook the reader. Make them ask for more.

Write the last sentence. Cause the reader to sigh with satisfaction.

Share a first sentence that you either wrote, or one that is a favorite.

My first sentence from my novel Surrender the Wind:
On a cool autumn twilight, Seth Braxton rode his horse through a grove of dark-green hemlocks in a primeval Virginia forest distressed he might not make it to Yorktown in time.


Melissa K Norris said...

Here's mine from my historical romance.
Twenty-one-year old Emmaline James set the gravy boat on the table, slipped off her apron, and crept to the parlor.

Rita Gerlach said...

I like it!
Your opening paints a vivid picture. Makes me wonder is she a wife, or a family caregiver? Is she getting ready a big dinner event? Okay, she's heard something obviously coming from the parlor and goes to investigate. It can't be something she'd normally hear. It's caught her attention. Hmm...what could it be?

Melissa K Norris said...

Yea! I'm glad you liked it.
This is the manuscript that the editor requested the full on.
I really learned the importance of verb choice here. Crept to the parlor sets the mood much better and conveys the rest of the scene than my original version with walked.